Technical copywriting and me.

Why do I think I’m qualified to do technical copywriting.

I’ve done a lot of it in the past, but I’m an adbiz guy, not a technical writer. I know how to separate out the boilerplate and chaff from a company’s literature and pare it down to the red meat of their story.

What I want to do is to write brochure sites for technology companies who want to let the world know what they are doing.

I’ve been studying science and technology all my life. I never completed my engineering degree, but I’ve been able to talk to engineers and translate their achievements into text that anybody can understand. I do it by being wrong about everything and letting the engineers show me where I was wrong, until I get it right.

My niche is not a certain category of companies. I see technical and industrial companies that are not explaining themselves well, companies that have a market advantage that the market is not seeing. Companies that have a new product that they want to distinguish from what the competition is offering. New companies with a breakthrough product.

I see them not only not explaining themselves well, but not explaining themselves at all.

As an outsider to their industry, I see that they are using the same word structures as other industries to make a generic façade of self-approval. They aren’t talking about what they actually do, they’re talking about industry norms in very abstract terms. So when they have a new product or a new method, they are unable to see it as an outsider might see it.

I can’t talk to anybody in any field without them telling me how technology has transformed their field. But they are so busy with their own field that they haven’t noticed the transformations in the next guy’s field. People think the changes in their own field are normal and well known.

I create a plain explanation to give potential customers a clear view of what you are offering in concrete terms, in active language, in context with the onrush of technology in your field.

How I do it

My creative goal is to learn what the engineers have accomplished and write it down clearly. My process is: rewriting. I interview the subject matter experts and get suggestions for further reading. I write a draft and show it to the engineers, and they laugh and point out my blunders. I rewrite it with my new understanding, and this time my errors are more subtle, but the engineers still find them.

Then I present a draft that they admit is a clear true explanation. And from there we devise a plan to market this explanation.

Copywriting for menubars? Yep.

I was researching something else and came across these two tech companies with diametrically opposed menubars.  One is so completely generic that you cannot get the slightest glimmer of what it is that they do.

Sangfor presents zero information about themselves in the menubar. It’s up to the visitor to want to press in further to find out if this is the kind of company they’re looking for.

The other company gives you plenty of info in their menubar:

These guys let you know a lot about themselves from the get-go. They are not wasting your time with generics.

My hobbyhorse is: information transfer.  Every aspect of a  page should transfer knowledge about the client into the visitor’s brain as fast and easy as possible.

(These are examples I found while prowling around on the Web, not anything I created. I have never had any connection with either company.)

Some companies say, Oh, we’re so huge and multifarious, we do so many things, we can’t be fairly represented by any one item.  But if you look at the landing page of the biggest company in the world, they’re able to cram every product line into their menubar.

Cannon Fodder

From Cannon’s “About” page:
Cannon has been providing Reliable Responsive Solutions to clients since 1976.
Cannon has earned a reputation for excellence, skillful organization, efficiency, precision, and innovative design solutions.
Quiz: which of these Cannon companies does this apply to?

I keep seeing sites of companies who feel they don’t have to explain themselves.

The other day I saw a CraigsList ad: “Cannon is hiring a temp technical writer!”

I looked into it because maybe they wanted technical copywriting for a marketing campaign. Also, the company is located just a few miles up the freeway from me.

What kind of technology were they involved with? I didn’t know which  Cannon it was.  Google showed me several different companies called Cannon.

Many of them turned out to be civil engineering companies. They talk about themselves in similar language. Each of them expect that you already know everything about Cannon.

Therefore, they don’t feel it is necessary for them to explain what they do. They’re only interested in talking to industry insiders who already know Cannon’s capabilities.

Which one was it? Was it the Cannon that showed people climbing a mountain on their home page?

No, it was this other Cannon whose “About” page  also showed  mountain climbers:

One thing the two Cannons have in common is that neither of them cares to go into any detail to explain what it is that they do. “Dedicated industrial solutions” for one of them, “Reliable responsive solutions” for the other.

Instead, each of them tell you their opinion of themselves using abstract language that ranks very low on the Readability Index. They don’t care if you read it or not. So they wouldn’t be interested in my services as a technical copywriter.

The CraigsList ad said that what they were looking for was a proposal writer skilled in compliance, and able to deliver a “report-like document.” I don’t know what a “report-like document is. Perhaps it is an industry term.

Smaller companies look at sites like this and think this is how big companies do it, so they try to emulate the pedantic tone of abstract principles.

My theory for smaller companies is that, since nobody knows anything about you, you might as well start with a clear plain explanation of what you offer to the world.

Clear plain explanations

By converting your technical information into a clear plain explanation, I can display your competitive advantages to a wider audience.

TorrLube’s home page gives you only aspirational generalities about tribology. Click picture for larger version.

How to break out of the center-of-the-world complex.

If you’re trying to expand your customer base,  you have to be specific about what you are offering.

Here’s what I did for TorrLube, a small company that for fifteen years has been selling a specialty lubricant called PFPE to the semiconductor industry for $5,000 a pint.

You can buy PFPE from the competition for $400 a pint. How does TorrLube command such a premium price?

You can’t find out from their home page. All they tell you is that they’re committed to working with engineers; they eliminate guesswork, they push the boundaries of what is known. Your headaches will decrease.

Their existing customers in the semiconductor industry already realize how much better TorrLube is than the competition. It goes without saying.

I condensed TorrLube’s story into a 260-word elevator pitch. Click to see full-size page.

They told me they wanted to expand into the aerospace industry. I created a clear plain explanation for them.

It was fun to learn about ultra-high-vacuum lubrication. Like a lot of tech companies, TorrLube was blasé about their own accomplishments because they were so familiar with their own esoterics. Their target audience was tribology engineers. There was no need to explain anything to their fellow engineers.

Part of the invisibility of TorrLube’s site is that they bill themselves as “unparalleled.” This may be true. But it doesn’t tell anybody anything. We don’t know what parallels are being talked about. The text gives us no foundation of knowledge to stand on.

I looked at several testimonials from engineers in the semiconductor industry. Many of them said, “I know why your product is worth the money, but I can’t get the suits and bean-counters to sign on.”

So I created a clear plain explanation for them. I studied their information and interviewed the owner and the upper echelon of TorrLube staff to get more information. I studied their foremost competitors. I saw that every other manufacturer was selling their product as a commodity. You want PFPE? Click here to buy.

Then, I presented a draft of information and re-interviewed the TorrLube engineers, now that I had a glimmer of what they were doing. They corrected my mistakes and pointed out new things they hadn’t thought of mentioning before.

I pushed for more explanations of their technology. I told them that my plan was to write about their technology until I got it right, with them correcting me along the way.

Eventually I condensed it into 260 words and a couple of pictures.

I specialize in finding out what is interesting about you.

Technical companies don’t need copywriting flimflam to sell their products. They need clear, rational explanations, not verbal cosmetics. Forcing their unique achievements into the straightjacket of buzzwords won’t help.

I present the facts in a sequential manner. When I begin a job for you, I am a person encountering your company for the first time, and I create a presentation that will demonstrate what I learn about you.

I aim the text at people who might not already know everything about you.


Hi Colin,
I am very impressed with the draft you created. I think you did a great job highlighting the differences between TorrLube and the competition. The copy is really good.

I also like how you touched on TorrLube history with Sputtered Films and I think you did a fantastic job illustrating how the distillation process separates out the narrow band of high performance molecules.

Overall, I think the page looks great. Very well done!

Jason Floyd
Marketing Director
The TorrLube Company




What is “copy?”

I’ve been a copywriter for forty years but most people don’t know what a copywriter is. My dad was a commercial artist in the Detroit ad industry so I grew up with an awareness of the word.

In the ad biz we called the text “copy.”

Copy is what copywriters write.

Santa Maria TechBrew meeting

Monday I went to Figueroa Mountain Brewing Company for this month’s Softec TechBrew presentation. “Like a TED talk with beer,” is how Softec bills it.

The presentation for this month’s meeting was by the chairman of the board of directors of Poly Canyon Ventures. I looked at their home page before going to the meeting.

From a copywriting standpoint, it is an empty page. You learn not one thing from your first impression of this landing page. The site assumes you are here to apply. You must already know what you are applying for.

Nathan Johnson’s talk explained that Poly Canyon is part of an expanding startup ecosystem that accelerates and funds good ideas. This is barely mentioned on their site. I volunteered to add my copywriting skills to their mix, if they wish.

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I’ve styled myself as “Colin Campbell, Copywriter” since the 1970s. My travel-writer pal Jerry Dunn had this made for me at a bazaar in India in the 1980s:

The Arabic is supposedly a phonetic transcription of “Colin Campbell, Copywriter,” although it could say “Go home, yankee vermin,” for all I know.

I’ve been a copywriter for forty years and I’ve been writing a daily journal about copywriting all this time and now I’m going to start doing it in public to explore what “copywriting” means today.

The word entered the language about a hundred years ago. Wiki tells me the first copywriter was a guy named John Emory Powers (1837-1919). He worked for department stores before going freelance in 1886 at age 49:

At a time when most advertisements featured hyperbole, Powers became noted for his focus on facts. He refused to write copy for a product unless he was convinced of its merits. He once stated that the most important thing in advertising is getting the attention of the reader by being interesting, and the next most important thing is to stick to the truth: “that means rectifying whatever’s wrong in the merchant’s business. If the truth isn’t tellable, fix it so it is.”

Until today I’d never heard of John Emory Powers. I like it that he was a stickler for facts. That’s the way I’ve always written copy: talk truth about the product, and people will believe it.

My first job out of college was as a production assistant at an in-house advertising office that created newspaper ads for all the Sears stores in southeastern Michigan.

It was the hot-metal era of newspaper production. The text was set in molten lead by a linotype operator on an ETAOIN SHRDLU keyboard.  Pictures had to be printed using zinc plates etched with a reverse version of the image. I became expert at writing copy with the precise number of words that fit exactly into the rigid metal layout.

 Later in my career when I was up against a deadline and didn’t know what to do, I would tell myself to fall back into the arms of Mother Sears and produce a clear plain description of what was being offered for sale.

In 1976 I became Associate Editor at Santa Barbara Magazine. The magazine offered a free copywriting service to advertisers. I was the free copywriter, besides writing and editing articles. Some of the advertisers hired me to write other ads and brochures. My freelance work expanded.

I took a full-time job as a copywriter at BBDO Detroit on the Dodge account and wrote radio, TV, newspaper and magazine ads. I was making the same money as Tigers’ rookie shortstop Alan Trammel. The first thing I bought was an IBM Correcting Selectric typewriter. I’ve been a typewriter keyboard addict all my life and that was the apex typewriter available in the world.

When the ad agency lost the Dodge account and fired everybody, I realized I preferred working for smaller companies instead of seeking approval through an infinite series of committee decisions. I went back to the West Coast and I’ve been a freelancer/contractor ever since.

I wrote a recruitment brochure for the Computer & Electrical Engineering department at UC Santa Barbara and used my check from that job to buy my first computer, an Osborne 1 with a massive 5″ monitor. It ran the CP/M operating system. The Felis heat absorption device was an after-market attachment.

Five years later I bought my first Macintosh along with a LaserWriter Plus and my career veered over into graphic production. I was able to supply my clients with camera-ready text and photos for their ads, flyers, and brochures.

I bought a modem and became enmeshed in the fledgling Bulletin Board System (BBS) in Santa Barbara. I was editor and publisher of the newsletter for the Santa Barbara Macintosh Users group, and I published one of the first on-line magazines showcasing the fiction of young writers.

I began attending hacker conventions. I moved to the Bay Area and did graphic production as a Quark/Illustrator/Photoshop jockey as the boom ramped up. I wrote for the Internet Shopping Network, and completed 17 contracts writing for, at the same time that I was webmaster for a home-improvement technology company.

Now the winds of time have left me semi-retired on the Central Coast of California. I’m looking around at industrial and technology sites and I see that they are not written with the basic precepts of copywriting in mind. I can help these companies a lot. So I’m going to illustrate what I mean by copywriting by discussing some of my projects from the past.